One of my favorite things about reading fantasy and historical fiction is the element of description. Setting scenes and locations is fundamental to these genres. It is also one of the most fun aspects to write, as you may have noticed if you read my Collection of Huphaea blog series. This blog post explores scene-setting from a couple perspectives. I found it informative and thought-provoking, see if you do too.~
Image by Thomas H. from Pixabay I have always been a visual writer. When formulating a scene, I have to envision each moment in exacting detail. As such, a good deal of my editing process involves scaling back, sharpening key images and finding short cuts to capture the feel of a moment with fewer words. Even…
On the heels of the finish of NaNoWriMo, this Writer Unboxed post discusses many of the questions authors need to answer for themselves as they decide on a publishing route. Indie or trad? Have you made your decision yet, before you start the editing process with your new manuscript? This post is full of information about this all important decision. Enjoy!~
I made my independent publishing debut back in 2011, and if this journey has taught me anything it is that realistic expectations are critical to a productive, rewarding experience. 2,413 more words
As you may have seen in the last Nyssa’s Nuggets, I added Cedar, an Australian Shepherd puppy to my pack.
Since then, Wicket, a Bernaussie puppy, has arrived. Wicket is 3.5 weeks younger than Cedar, and a complete love. He got the Bernese personality and coloring, but with a natural bobtail that gives him a perfect Ewok bum—hence the name, Wicket.
WicketIs that not the cutest fuzzy bum?
There isn’t much height difference between the two of them now, but Cedar is ten pounds heavier than Wicket. Cedar is a beast, built like a fire hydrant—all muscle and bone. He is also as fiery as his coat and his Leo birthday… He is and will be a handful, for sure.
Cedar, 3.5 mos
Needless to say, things have gone a bit wonky here as far as any schedule goes. Eleanorah hasn’t left for less chaotic locales, yet, in fact she has been honing some writing skills and has managed to get another random scene on the page.
She apologizes for the absence in the story and is eager to get back to it, pronto! Thank you for your patience, here’s hoping all is well with all of you at this whirlwind time of year even if we weren’t dealing with a resurging pandemic.
Happy Thanksgiving to all of my fellow Americans. Be on the lookout for an episode from Huphaea very soon! I’m sure you will be able to follow the puppies’ growth with Nyssa’s Nuggets, she will be an integral tutor in their education.
Well, I’ve gone and done it—disrupted Nyssa’s world. I brought home a puppy, and am expecting another one to arrive any day now. She was integral to raising Dash in our family and I believe she will be with these two as well. If there is one thing I have to keep a close eye on though, it is how rough Nyssa can be with puppies.
She is genuinely trying to play, she just doesn’t realize that one swipe of her big foot is enough to send them tumbling and me cringing.
It just means that for quite a while we have policed outdoor sessions when the puppy zoomies start. When I express my displeasure to her, she looks at me like “But, I am just playing!” Gentle is in her nature, but not in her physical repertoire so much. She doesn’t realize how big she is.
In editing or critiquing, this is a concept we must always be cognizant of. It is easy to grasp, but not as easy to apply to the language of our commentary. It is truly one of the most challenging parts of editing—how to convey our concerns, questions, critiques in a manner that is able to be understood by the author, but that does not offend or put them off.
In other words, being gentle with our authors.
I approach this facet of editing from the angle of “How would I receive this if I were the author?” Of course, I do want to make sure they understand my points, and that my suggestions are designed to improve and enhance. The language used to present them is the most important part of the exchange.
I spend much time composing comments and editorial letters that do not discourage; turning the shortcomings of a piece into opportunities to challenge their creativity, to draw out the threads from the depth of the story in the author’s head, and to construct scenes from an alternate POV to strengthen them (to name a few specifics).
Just because I’m being paid to offer my professional observations does not mean they should be presented devoid of empathy, in a manner that provokes strong emotions.
In no way am I saying that editors in general don’t do this. I know that they do. But watching Nyssa play with a much smaller, floppy puppy is a reminder that the objective can always be attained in a much gentler manner, and it should be.
Authors are as full of the “soft bones” of their stories as little Cedar the Aussie puppy is here. We want to make them feel safe in our zone of interaction, and then watch the collaboration take shape.
Have a great week! Woof woof roooooo! 🐕🦺~
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I belong to a local writing group here in town. This is my second session with this set of ladies for Tuesday morning Zoom meetings. I wasn’t sure how I would do with it when I began, but knowing my desire is to have people read my novel, it seemed a logical place to start. Some months later, I really enjoy myself and am often surprised at the composition I come up with. I thought I would share this one with you just for the sake of sharing. Let me know what you think of it.~
It snowed on Friday. I’d say about five inches fell here, since it went on longer than it was forecast to. Did that surprise me? Not really, considering two days earlier it rained all day and it was supposed to be the best day of the week. But we are New Englanders, we take what comes and commence bitching about the weatherpeople like champs. Oh well.
Nyssa enthralled with the snow
The snow didn’t bother me, as it appeared to for many of my close comrades. My dog Nyssa waits six months for that cold, white stuff to fall and she is in her glory, stretching out her full length to get as much of it on her as possible. She spends hours outside in it, just laying there, or chasing Dash around, then she comes inside with a crusty snow blanket on. It’s hard not to smile and laugh at her simple delight in something totally natural.
After the snow stopped falling, I took Nyssa for her afternoon walk. The sky was crystal clear blue then, the sun was out, and the world around me had that muffled feeling of being coated with a thick blanket. I took a picture of Nyssa trotting ahead of me down the path toward the woods, trees laden with a pristine frosting of white, and posted it on social media with the caption “The muffled silence of early snow is deafening.” In that moment, it truly was, and that was the very first thing that popped into my mind.
heading into the silence
I thought about it for the duration of our walk. What is it about that first snowfall that is so unique? This one happened to come when many leaves are still on the trees, so the smaller saplings groaned under the unwelcome weight, bending down to ask the earth for more support, it seemed. It closed in the canopy above us, making the forest into a tent instead of an amphitheater. An air of suspense hung all around as the arched saplings threatened to dump their cargo down my back if I should disturb them and set them free.
We padded on along the snowed-in path, Nyssa’s feet making no noise, while mine churned out that grunting sound that compressed snow makes. No birds sang, no melting clumps plopped into the sea of white below, nothing moved or sounded except us. It was mesmerizing.
It may be an oxymoron to say the silence is deafening, or even that silence has a sound, but both are true. The air on that new snowy afternoon had a presence that only happens in that situation. It took up all of the space that was allowed by the drooping branches, fountains of encased leaves, and the space in my jacket hood. My ears felt attuned, on edge even, straining to hear something, anything, but there wasn’t any discernable sound there. And that was a sound in itself. It made me aware of everything I would normally hear on this walk for all of its absence.
Then I also thought, what of the other senses could this happen with? Not smell, or taste. Those are pretty absolute. Sight? I would argue yes, that’s what we as writers try to do, create something with words that isn’t seen with the eyes so much. And perhaps even touch, as it is possible to feel something that is not, or feel something in its absence.
Nyssa and I finished our walk and the awe still held. Perhaps I was dreaming and we were walking in some New England-wide snow globe on an alien’s shelf that they shook up for the first time in months just for giggles. Either way, the new snow silence held my attention for that stretch of hours last Friday, and it is something I look forward to after snowstorms. Wrapped in a thick white muffler, the land holds its breath and the sound of the silence is truly deafening.~
Have you ever heard that kind of silence? Are there other experiences that give you that kind of feeling? Comment below and let me know, I’d love to know.
Dialogue is one of the integral pieces of a story. It is a vehicle for building characters, deepening empathy, advancing the plot, and setting tone and pace. Some authors find it difficult, while others revel in composing it. Wherever you fall on this spectrum, this podcast episode is full of tips on writing strong dialogue. Give it a listen!~
Hello Rebels, welcome to episode 58 of The Rebel Author Podcast. This week I’m talking to dialogue expert, Jeff Elkins. We’ll be talking through tips and tricks to boost your character conversations as well as deepening your characterisation. In this episode we cover: The most important elements when creating dialogue Mistakes to avoid when writing…
Nyssa and her mentor/buddy Pebbles, a red Siberian husky
At the moment I have two dogs, (Nyssa and Dash), but several times a month we have Pebbles also when she is staying upstairs with my brother and nephew. Pebbles is two years older than Nyssa and helped to raise her, but you wouldn’t be able to tell that now.
As the photo indicates, Nyssa is the boss here. And she makes sure Pebbles knows it from the very first moment she comes through the door. There is no aggression, Nyssa just mutters at Pebbles for a second, wags her tail, and then guides Pebbles quickly past the bone pile while I pick them up. Then they are off to the yard to hang out and chase Dash around.
Nyssa and Pebbles have a long relationship, yet Nyssa communicates her position to Pebbles upfront, every time.
In editing terms, communication from the start of the author-editor relationship is crucial. The more open the dialogue, the smoother the process can proceed.
Good, open communication can often mean the results are better as well. Working together toward the common goal promises an improved manuscript as the outcome.
That said, the success begins during the interview process with honesty on both sides.
Sure, the editor may really want the job, but that shouldn’t cloud their assessment of whether they are a good fit for the manuscript.
Conversely, an editor may have come highly recommended by a friend who writes thrillers, but that does not mean their editing style will mesh with your fantasy novel.
We are often told to play to our strengths—that can be obvious. However, the real magic may happen when we are familiar with our weaknesses and we partner with someone who understands them.
And that is all about communication. From minute one.
Once it is established, though, that communication is easy to return to whenever necessary, and often deepens over time. Like Nyssa and Pebbles, they renew the respect in a few seconds and then its just like they were never apart.
Why bicker over a silly bone pile when there’s a Dash to chase? Come on, Pebbles says. Whatever, let’s just go. 😉
Have a great week! Woof woof rooooooo!🐕🦺
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Hello Everyone! Does it seem to you that the months go faster as we approach the end of the year? October has vanished, which means I’ve been too busy to notice it. We have had some odd weather for New England, but also some perfect fall days, which I am thankful for. The foliage colors have been vibrant and long-lasting, as long as there is no wind. But here we are on the week leading up to a full moon on a Halloween Saturday!
I wonder how many people still have that candy that appeared in the stores in July…
This is another audio only episode, a continuation of the last and lots of dialogue with not much to illustrate, so audio is the better format. I enjoy making the audio episodes, I hope you find them fun too. Enjoy your week, and Happy Halloween and Samhain. Trick or treat!~
The last audio episode had Elahna returning from a day in Cragbend to meet a Sentient horse, Arlen and become embroiled in a horse-horsemaster disagreement. Arlen won; no surprise, really, she knows her business.Elahna had returned to her room afterward to freshen up for dinner, so we will pick it up there….~
Click the orange arrow to play episode 16…
That was quite a dinner, right? The food in Huphaea was always incredible, it is one of the things I miss most. Do you think Elahna and Ivy will gel on the ride to Irillo, or will it be awkward? At least the horses seem to have things sorted out, thanks to Arlen. I never did find out how young Thorn made out, but I would wager his days got a whole lot more regimented. I have to say part of me wanted to stick around to see his mother, Larix, just because of how Daphne made her sound. But I had bigger things to tackle. It will be on toward Irillo next time!~
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We all know dogs are great sleepers, and Nyssa is no exception. I marvel at her sense of time. She wakes me up faithfully every day at the same time and she has an “off” button in the evening. During the day, she keeps an eye on me and my movements and when I’m working, she sacks out. She is always well-rested and ready to go when the time is right.
I know many freelancers and editors who would like to be that way—well-rested. But somewhere in the recesses of our minds, we know the importance of getting enough rest and taking care of ourselves, especially during times of change and uncertainty.
I often want to burn the candle at both ends and stay up late reading for pleasure, or just finishing one more edit, but the price I pay in the morning is usually not worth it. Then I usually see Nyssa, passed out on the couch, and my eyelids begin to slowly close as if on cue. Pay attention to your body—it knows.
Be good to yourself. Nap when you can. 😊
Have a great week! Woof woof rooooooo!🐕🦺
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Nyssa is always aware of what is going on around her, even when she is sleeping. Akitas are excellent guard dogs and she is no exception. She is also maddeningly NOSY—I call her Nosy Nyssa when we have to pause in our walk for her to watch the neighbor wheel his trash barrel to the end of his drive, or watch someone else back out of their garage. She also loves to follow and bark at my nephew when he walks down to the barn, EVERY time.
Though her being nosy means she often gets sidetracked by details, it also indicates that she takes in all that is in her vicinity and she sees the big picture around her.
Nyssa’s attention can be likened to the mindset I slip into when I’m working on a developmental edit.
It can be easy to get involved with the small details in a manuscript, but my awareness has to be about the larger elements of the story—character, pace, story arc, continuity, to name a few. Punctuation doesn’t really matter if the protagonist is a flat Mary-Sue that readers can’t care about.
The focus becomes which of these larger parts can benefit from some improvement and how that affects the other pieces of the narrative. If I suggest changes to one element, what other parts will the author need to work on to make those changes work, and what does that do to the overall story?
A developmental edit could be compared to a ball of yarn, but I think pieces of a larger picture or the layers of an onion are more accurate portrayals. The smaller parts make up the whole, and the whole is made of smaller parts. Right?
Like Nyssa, I may see the details, but ultimately I concentrate on the environment they are in to ensure it is the best it can be. Then the details usually fall into place for the author on their own.
Just like the neighbor who walks back up his driveway is of no consequence to Nyssa anymore. She understood the big picture, and the detail took care of itself.
Have a great week! Woof woof rooooooo! 🐕🦺
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